Showing posts with label Miranda Yuan. Show all posts
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Friday, 12 September 2025

Given Poems 2025 – Winning Poems

Ngā mihi ki a koutou, thank you for sending us your poems for this landmark tenth edition of Given Words. We received over 160 poems and have chosen 64 to publish here on Given Words. The winning poems have been selected by Sophia Wilson, Pat White and Charles Olsen. (You can read about us here.) We have also awarded three Special Mentions in each category.

Charles Olsen comments on the poems on behalf of the judges: First, I’d like to say a special thank you to the filmmakers who created the word films for this year’s Given Words: Ebba Jahn, Tom Konyves, Cindy Stockton Moore, Ian Gibbins and Colm Scully. They are all well-respected filmmakers in the field of poetry film and videopoetry, and I find it fascinating the ways they use image and sound to add layers of meaning to words and poems. (You can find out more about them here.)

Choosing the five word films from all the submissions was tricky and Pat White beautifully expressed the risks we faced with the selection: ‘For 2025 the Given Words hold an interesting conundrum for the aspiring poet: justice, endure, pair, lightfast, hold, are words that invite judgement and confirmation. A lot of the best poetry is an exploration, launching into the wonder of the unknown, finding where language will take us. Judgement takes us to what we already think we know, in that way words like justice and endure are traps for the unwary in a world of poetry, image and metaphor.'

Choosing the winning poems and poems to share on Given Words is also fraught with difficulties! I’m very grateful to Sophia Wilson and Pat White for being part of this process with me again this year, picking up on poems I may have overlooked, sharing their impressions and wisdom. Each year I’m reminded of the importance of listening and being open to different ways of looking.

Judging a competition also gives a new perspective on ones own work not being selected. Sophia comments, ‘Some otherwise excellent poems were let down by lines or stanzas that felt extraneous, or effortful attempts to include a given word that interrupted the poem’s flow.’ I’ve often gone from ‘enduring the injustice of rejection’ to completely re-writing my text—learning a lot in the process—and being grateful it wasn’t chosen in its original form. This has even happened multiple times with the same piece of writing. Much as I’d like to, unfortunately I don’t have the resources to give feedback on all the poems sent in, but I recommend getting in touch with a local writing group where you can share, and get feedback on, your work. There are groups across the country listed on Te Puni Kaituhi o Aotearoa | The New Zealand Society of Authors NZSA or ask in your local library.

One of the lovely things about Given Words is the sense of a shared journey and seeing how others have taken different paths with the same five words. Sophia, Pat and I share our impressions below, but I recommend reading the selection of poems first and returning here to compare notes!

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Please note: I’ve included the poet’s names below, but when we were judging the poems we didn’t know who had written them.

I thought Dessa BLUU’s poem Gatekeepers deceptively simple, with each given word giving form to a stanza adding to the poem’s arc, and I loved her use of lightfast: ‘lightfast as tapa in the Pasifika sun / Refusing to fade’. The lines ‘We hold our breath / At the gallery’s edge’ and ‘a pair of hands / Break glass to let light in’ subtly hint at the wiri and Hana-Rāwhiti Maipi-Clarke’s defiant protest in parliament.

Indigenous themes, politics and colonialism were also a feature in Elspeth Tilley’s Dotterel. It put me in mind of Te Kahu Rolleston, spoken word poet and educator with Writers in Schools, talking about how putting your classes into poetry can help you remember things. Here the complex story of naturalist, politician and land purchase commissioner, Walter Mantell, is brought to life in all its complexity. Central to the poem is the migration of the dotteral, how it usurps the bird’s Māori name and, like Mantell himself, ‘migrates south once more’. I enjoyed the wonderful language of this prose poem: ‘…and adze to slice whenua for clinker and topple rimu for corduroy planking’. I initially thought clinker and corduroy planking had to do with boats, but didn’t get its relation with whenua. Actually they are raw materials being extracted by Māori labourers for road construction.

A walk can become a poem and a way to reflect on our relationships. With its opening lines, a tribute to poet John Allison, who died last year—‘A pair of muscle-crusted black buoys, / sea biscuits by the dozen, a riddle of / three-pronged footprints. You taught me / to look, and look again.’ —Cataloguing the beach by Jenna Heller is, in Pat’s words, ‘a beautifully rendered poem’. I loved the physicality of the given words in: ‘time is / a myth that we agree to endure and justice / is salt in unseen wounds.’

‘A well-constructed response to a graveside experienced’, writes Pat of Larthia speaks by Denise O’Hagan, which is inspired by a visit to the Regolini-Galassi tomb (dating to c. 680-660 BCE) in Cerveteri, Italy, and, in wonderfully descriptive verse, gives a present-day voice to its occupant: ‘truth is, / I never wanted an afterlife’.

Pinhole by Renee Liang shows ‘restraint and skill’ says Pat, ‘a simple image is used to discuss the passage of time, and the way ageing occurs while we’re elsewhere’. I especially enjoyed the echoes of words across the poem—justice/held court and those suggesting birth (foetal, impregnated, baby) and death (buried, exhumed). Pinhole stood out for Sophia, as did Dose by Lincoln Jaques, 'in their economy of language, attention to structure, and the way the poet centred their work cleverly around a particular scenario.'

‘The seamless daring with which the poet highlights political and environmental dysfunction’ and ‘the juxtaposition of cynicism with covert optimism of the poem’s brilliant final lines’ wrote Sophia of Lightfast by Gail Zing, while Pat stated ‘Lightfast carries us along without a semblance of cohesion while each image adds to the theme critiquing our need for instant gratification in a culture of purchasing power.’ You’ll have to read the poem to see what they are on about!

Nō Te Paruparu, Nō Te Purapura | Of the Mud, Of the Seed by Cindy Kurukaanga is very visual and tactile, and I could imagine it in te reo as a waiata or even a haka. Pat comments the poem has ‘a timeless quality’ with its ‘idea of time healing, through the earth and what comes from it.’ He also praises the way it incorporates the word justice ‘without drawing attention to itself’.

We could continue discussing the charm and alive senses of Whalefall by Thalia Peterson, the impossibility of knitting the sea in Ashlee-Ann Sneller’s #584 The Treaty Principles Bill and More, ask who is speaking in of Mārama over Hauturu and palpitations of Matariki stars by Piet Nieuwland with its opening line ‘My secret occupation is to be human’—highlighted by Sophia alongside Varanasi Incantation by Lee Thomson, for their 'refreshing and unique portrayals'—, or delve further into Lincoln Jaques’ Dose where ‘This life each minute / is a pass-the-parcel / where it’s never your turn’…

In the end it was ‘the adept tongue-in-cheek humour and irony’—as Sophia commented—of Sadie Yetton’s Venus, Don’t You Laugh At Me, which really made it stand out for us. Pat described it as ‘a powerful poem, it manages to capture a world of mistakes and miracles without explanation or self-pity, yet a picture emerges of someone growing into wisdom even while blundering through her days, loving and giving, receiving hurt and hope along the way, with a sort of courageous defiance’. It is very relatable and bounds along right up to the finality and ironic self-deprecation of the two-hundredth word: ‘Look at who you made / Love it’. Sophia praised the way the given words ‘harmonise with the subject matter and poetic tone’ and how ‘words and images are unleashed that simultaneously undercut, elevate, accuse and surprise’.

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Sophia speaks for all of us when she says ‘I adore reading the Under 16's entries, but without a doubt it is the harder portion of the competition to judge. It's almost impossible to compare the work of a 15 year-old to that of an 8 or 9 year-old. I was so impressed this year by the variety and scope of emotions and topics featuring in the submissions. There was so much love, sadness, despair, grief, political, environmental and spiritual awareness and concern for the future expressed by our younger poets as well as cowboy duels, nightmare basements, shipwreck incantations and humour!’ She was particularly struck by the uses of the word pair: ‘There were pairs of birds, pairs of clouds, of opposite hands, lovers’ hands and monster’s hands, pairs of willows, of rusty hinges, fractured pairs, monochrome pairs, paired gummies and pairs of pixelated eyes.’

Lamenting that we don’t publish all the poems that we receive, Sophia highlighted some gorgeous lines from poems that did not make it in this time, such as: 'red and purple flavour in the air / Like a flipped fantasy' (Lily Malcolm, 10), ‘Hold yourself tall against the rain’ (Mila Furniss, 13), 'light tugging at my drenched dress' (Charlotte Gilbert, 13), 'justice slips off of me like a stick of butter' (Daisy Forster, 12), 'The slow unravelling of joy' (Alex Miller, 12), 'celestial army / that is dancing across the moon tonight' (Penelope Kerr, 13), ‘hope stays lightfast—a small, stubborn spark' (Lena Shinn, 13), 'you will lose limbs of your own in return for the feeling of being / complete' (Mika Delowe, 14), 'blackened trees branch out like veins' (Belle Fisher-Starzynski, 12), and 'waves rolled higher / The clouds land lower / A pair of birds chirped louder […] The rain poured harder' (Francesca Russ, 11). We could continue and create a collective poem of everyone’s work…

Sophia remarked on the ‘evocative and moving interweaving of dream and wake, personal and environmental’ in Colour blank by Lucia Sampson where ‘The world was lightfast, / I held 1000 colours in my palm’ is contrasted with ‘bleached sunrise, / blank paper, bed sheet, cornstarch’ and ‘monochrome pairs: / 2 leafless trees, / 2 boneless fish, / 2 songless birds’, and on the ‘beautiful imagery and environmental message’ of Claire Zhao’s poem The Stars Build Shadows, which tells of ‘paper-flower / candles lightfast in the moonlight. / Trees of kelp […] these broken seas.’

Pat highlighted I know everything but I know nothing by 9 year-old Charlie St John, writing ‘A set of vivid images hold this poem together, and they’re more striking by being commonplace or surprising by their juxtaposition. And to finish with the image of the apple, with all that signifies in our culture of sin and redemption, is very powerful. Repetition is a simple form, but handled so well here. Somehow it becomes of no concern that cats carry lunch money, or that detergent gets eaten, the images contain their own ironies and truths.’ And of Lilly Pan’s poem The painter who forgot to use lightfast paint, he points out ‘Using the structure of the courtroom holds this poem together, and handles the concept of justice easily. There is audacity in using Dae Vincy as a name… very droll. Why it works is because the poem ends without a judgement. Different voices are created, while the given words are incorporated seamlessly. And the entire piece is satisfyingly “different” in its vision.’

My purple life! by Gia Beckett (also 9 years old) is ‘a wonderful, short and well-formed poem’ says Sophia, and asks ‘where else could we read about “an indigo squish mellow named Justice”?’ Pat praises its ‘direct clarity and sense of playfulness’ and writes ‘This riff on the famous, “When I grow old I’ll wear purple,” is complete in its own right. Such a simple little idea, homely and vivid, yet adventurous at the same time.’ Gia even put her title in purple, and here we’ve taken the liberty to put her whole poem in purple!

As AI seems to inveigle its way into our lives, I was surprised only a couple of people admitted to using it in the writing of their poems, and even then only as a source of advice on word use rather than a partner in the creative process. Lily Richards takes on the theme of artificial intelligence in Thread of reality with reflections on truth and how we are complicit in our use of AI. Her playful use of symbols running through the poem give a visual parallel to the theme.

Sophia commented on Sabrina Li’s poem Photos Taken on the Day They Said It Was Over highlighting its ‘poetic allusion to personal, spiritual and environmental assault’. I found it abstract, spacious, thoughtful and subtle. This was taken up by Pat saying the poem ‘hints at knowledge which is cultural, ancient and private. At the same time, it opens in the commonplace of gender, with images that are intimate. The sense of tension between what is common knowledge, and in some way mysterious, attracts the readers attention. Subtle, yet powerful stuff to be penned by a fifteen-year-old.’

In the ten years of Given Words we’ve never had a unanimous decision on the winner—each poet-judge-reader bringing their own tastes and life experiences, finding poems that speak to them in different ways—so it was a lovely surprise to find we had all selected in first place The Menu by Miranda Yuan. It is succinct with each word perfectly integrated into the poem. Five dishes served with irony and social criticism. Sophia described it as ‘a beautifully structured poem which cleverly and understatedly expresses its opposition to political injustice, economic inequality, competition for resources, and animal exploitation.’ She highlighted ‘the final stanza/course/Dessert in which fraught love is brilliantly linked to an overheating world.’ Pat commented how ‘We’re sucked into a compelling set of images, because we like reading a menu’ and that it ‘manages to lightly say serious things that we’d gloss over in another setting. A most satisfying piece of poetry to dine on… as it were.’


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Having read all the poems, made our individual choices, compared notes and agreed on the awards, we could finally look up the names of the poets. We are delighted to announce the winner of Best Poem is Sadie Yetton for her poem Venus, Don’t You Laugh At Me and the winner of Best Poem by Under-16s—for the second year running—is Miranda Yuan for her poem The Menu. They will receive books courtesy of The Cuba Press and Massey University Press.

For this 10th edition, and because there were so many wonderful poems, we would also like to award Special Mentions in the adults category to Gail Zing for her poem Lightfast, Cindy Kurukaanga for her poem Nō Te Paruparu, Nō Te Purapura | Of the Mud, Of the Seed, and to Renee Liang for her poem Pinhole. In the under-16s category, Special Mentions go to Sabrina Li for her poem Photos taken the day they said it was over, Gia Beckett for her poem My Purple Life!, and Lily Richards for her poem Thread of Reality. Congratulations to all on behalf of Given Words, The Cuba Press and Massey University Press.

Below are the winning poems and Special Mentions. We also invite you to read our selection of the rest of the poems from adults here and from under-16s here. All entries had to include the following five words: pair, endure, lightfast, hold, and justice.



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Venus, Don’t You Laugh At Me

Venus, don’t you laugh at me
I’m your daughter, it appears you made a crooked one
Stilted in manner, steadfast in mania
Unjust in justice, your infinite amusement
Venus, you birthed a brute
You spat out a savage
You knew I’d fall on the way of love
Just as wolves fall on rabbits
Making a mess of how I eat it; blood, bones, brain
Clueless how to clean up after myself
What have I ever been if not your doing?
I was a child, then a child with a woman’s voice
I was lightning, lightfast, then lightless
I was a person, then somehow only parts of one
But I’ve always been of your blood
And you can’t bleed it out of me
A creature is still a child if it claims to be
A freak is due her worth if she endures
Venus, I know why you laugh at me
Because not feigning hilarity
At your own incompetence is worse than being so
Even with your back to me, we’re a pair of siamese souls
Because this rabid thing resembles its mother
And she wants you to hold her like you mean it
Look at who you made
Love it


Sadie Yetton
Tāmaki Makaurau Auckland


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The Menu

Tonight’s Special: The Final Feast

Appetizer
Bread
And circuses
to entertain the masses.
Elevated rations
of what the poor had to endure.
Olive
A single fruit offered from the branch.
Starvation is minimalism,
and minimalism is art.

Main
Lamb
From the slaughter
with flesh that tastes like still-warm blood.
Pair it with red wine
lightfast on the lips.
Whose feet had juiced the grapes?
Let’s raise a glass to justice.

Dessert
Pomegranate
Six seeds to hold you–
sweet as the promise of love.
Brûlée
The world burns with a hint of orange.


Miranda Yuan, aged 15
Ōtautahi Christchurch


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Nō Te Paruparu, Nō Te Purapura | Of the Mud, Of the Seed

They came to me while
barefoot in bitter mud, 
with aeons angry whakapapa,
they held me there.
 
Hands stretched through flesh soaked earth,
wrapped my feet in weighted expectation.
 
My soles a pair of seeds, husks
waiting to be pierced by
a justice of tīpuna, as steadfast as
            battle-blooded taiaha.
 
Hope takes root.
Lightfast, it endures
this bright white blaze.


Cindy Kurukaanga
Helena Bay, Northland


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My Purple Life!

I have a pair of purple shoes
lightfast and lightning fast.
I have a lavender laptop case –
it endures knocks and drops.
My rabbit’s fur is indigo purple –
I stroke and hold her floof.
I have lavender flowers
on my purple nightstand.
I have an indigo squish mellow
named Justice.
Today, I’m getting my hair dyed
PURPLE!



Gia Beckett, aged 9
Ōtautahi Christchurch


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Lightfast

Like the way gel polish from Barrington Mall lasts on your toenails
all month. Or the blades of wind grass hold silver-orange
against gathering skies dark as a male pūtakitaki’s head; some animals
know how to pair properly, dragging their plastic six-pack rings
across the ponds, at least one of them breathing.

The way the sun and rain threaten in equal measure. If
we brought back Māui, could he hold down the price
of cheese and butter in our big-gotten culture that’s lasted longer
than our short-term memory on reality, consequence looming large
as Erik Kennedy’s horse on the home stretch to justice.

The way some things endure, lines of a poem, or light beams
on aluminium window frames in new suburbs, or pop-up swamps.



Gail Zing
Ōtautahi Christchurch


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Photos Taken on the Day They Said It Was Over
(in Polaroid captions)


One: the pairing room

                    Lightfast.

Violet sky,
     then pink.
               yellow,
               amber, then
Blue.

an odd pair of tūī and miromiro
cut the hush
with honey-throated cries.

and pepeketua harbouring
within the tangle of rimu roots,
fizzle.
                                                  watch them.

their melodies weave melted butter
into strands that lie
connected. Between our forests,


the tether is diaphanous.

               Two: the endurance chamber

The fan spun slowly,
slow, but not slow enough
to cool the heat between my ribs

                         with pooling light on cold tiles,
I smile without knowing why.

Already dressed,
his shirt half-buttoned, eyes elsewhere
but my eyes are direct.
                         The stained kōkōwai sheets are below
                         and finger-like ponga fronds
                         prod at my spine.
                                                       endure it,
               I will
               – but it’s just so funny
                         that I can live so insignificantly.

It made sense at the time,
So,     I stayed still like a ragdoll.
Disregarded.

limp body.

               soft body.

It’s what it truly means to be a woman.


kissing my forehead,
I thank him,
as if this ritual
was some kind of

justice.

                    Three: the photo


In order to hold me,
he gave me his condolences.


Sabrina Li, aged 15
Ōtautahi Christchurch


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pinhole

for years this box
has waited
for justice

lightfast
but for that moment
paired momentarily
with sunlight

foetal-curled film
impregnated

its open mouth taped shut
tossed
in a box and buried
to endure

now it’s been exhumed.
the red room holds court.
the baby at last developed
and held to the light –

the class of 1973
grins from the time capsule.


Renee Liang 梁文蔚
Tāmaki Makaurau Auckland


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Thread of reality

Hold onto the final threads of reality, ——
the world around you collapsed into the hands
of an unnamed artificial intelligence.
The line blurred bet/ween
the “truth” and the “lie”
pairs of pixelated eyes follow you
<Everywhere.>

Those who live in the world will watch in awe as
they realise the world isn’t
lightfast; it f a d e s.
It loses colour faster than you want it to.
You wonder
Why?
but you are the one draining life
and replacing it with grey,
you are the one allowing this to happen.

There is no way to justify what we are doing
to the world.
But you and I both know we can’t endure this much longer soon
the threads will sever — —
and you will have to let go. – – – – – –


Lily Richards, aged 14
Canterbury


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About the Poets


Sadie Yetton is a writer, reader and poet based in Auckland. She has been writing ever since she can remember, with a focus on poetry and short stories, and she also hopes to publish a novel. She is a geek about post-punk and 80s music (looking at you, Echo & the Bunnymen) and this has inspired involvement in, and enjoyment of, songwriting and singing. She is interested in pursuing creative writing and publishing, but she doesn’t discriminate between creative mediums – she has also dabbled in acting, fronting bands and making pottery. You can find her on IG @joanofauckland.


Miranda Yuan is a year eleven student and aspiring writer at Burnside High School. Her works stand upon the shoulders of giants such as Donna Tartt and Lana del Rey, drawing inspiration from romanticisation and the critique of such. She specialises in conceptual prose that is rich in thematic imagery of beauty, obsession, and decay.


Cindy Kurukaanga (Ngāti Rangi, Te Āti Haunui a Pāpārangi, Ngāti Tūwharetoa) discovered a love for creative writing later in life. She lives in Whangārei with her husband and wonky-legged bob cat called Tūi. Cindy has poems published with Broken Spine Arts and work online in Flash Frontier and Voicemail Poems. She can be found on Bluesky @kakapowhakatoi.bsky.social


Gia Beckett loves purple and bouncing on her trampoline. It is her first year going to the Write On young writers class at Heathcote Valley School and her first time published.


Renee Liang 梁文蔚 MNZM has toured eight plays, is a poet and collaborates on visual arts works, dance, film, opera, community events and music. IG @piobird | LinkedIn Dr Renee Liang MNZM


Sabrina Li is a 15 year old aspiring poet who goes to Rangi Ruru Girls’ School in Ōtautahi Christchurch. She enjoys experimenting in her writing with themes of the environment or human nature for fun. Sabrina also enjoys spending time with her close friends at Write On School for Young Writers, and working with them to make a poetry chapbook. She’s also had her poetry published in the 2026 edition of the Poetry Aotearoa Yearbook, Write-On, and previously in Given Words.


Lily Richards lives in Ōtautahi, Christchurch. She attends the Write On School for Young Writers and enjoys experimenting with prose and poetry. She likes reading books by Elizabeth Lim and Jennifer Lynn Barnes. She also enjoys horse riding and going on holiday.


Gail Zing is an award-winning writer from Ōtautahi Christchurch, author of three collections of poetry, including Some Bird selected by New Zealand Listener for best poetry books 2024, and widely published in places such as Poetry Aotearoa, Cordite Poetry Review, Blue Nib, Landfall and others. When she's not dreaming up poems in the hills, she's editing them at the kitchen table or teaching them at Write On School for Young Writers. Website The Seventh Letter | IG @gail_zing_poet | FB


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Continue reading our selection of poems from adults here and from under-16s here.


Wednesday, 11 September 2024

Given Poems 2024 – Winning Poems

Ngā mihi ki a koutou for writing your poems for this edition of Given Words. We received 250 poems and have chosen 54 to publish here on Given Words. The winning poems have been selected by Sophia Wilson, Pat White and Charles Olsen. (You can read about us here.)

Charles Olsen comments on the poems on behalf of the judges: Sometimes the five words are so naturally absorbed into a poem that I have to read it a few times before I find them all. This didn’t happen with the mouthful ‘phantasmagoria’, although lines like ‘phantasmagoria fast-forwarded’, ‘a fantasy a fever dream / phantasmagoria’, ‘the phantasmagoria of man turned sepia’ and ‘the flavour of this curated phantasmagoria’, using alliteration, and the play of sounds, came closest. It was lovely to hear from one teacher who invited younger students to come up with their own meanings before they looked up the word in the dictionary. They said: the name of a cocktail, an ancient dance, a spell, a type of bird, among many more. Who’s to say these aren’t all true in the phantasmagoria of meaning?

As I write up my impressions on each poem I look forward to comparing notes later with the other two judges and I’m grateful to Sophia Wilson and Pat White for their thoughtful insights. As always, I recommend you first go on your own journey through our selection of poems and then come back here afterwards to compare impressions… although we try not to give too much away!

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There was a wonderful sense of mystery in The Rocket, evoking a future without humans. Sophia highlights its ‘innovative weaving of dreamlike imagery’, where ‘sinister hints of apocalypse and environmental collapse contrast with the resilience of the natural world.’ I ask myself if it is the rocket that is thinking, feeling, that delineates, calibrates, ponders, or perhaps it could be the exploring tendrils. Sophia also highlights the ‘nostalgia and surprise conjured by the ending’.

Putting the reader into the mind of another was also a feature of How bees see us. Pat points to the ‘careful language and restraint’ as the poem focusses on ‘the otherworldliness of the remarkable insects that pollinate our lives in more ways than one.’ Sophia is struck by ‘the progression of images: “these children of the sun / their bodies of fire and ash / on diaphanous wings” are juxtaposed with we (humans) as “barrier[s] of fog and fume”, “marauding blobs of light” and “bull’s-eye blotches” between them and their “darling blooms”.'

I particularly enjoy how the five words are used in such a natural understated way in Wishbones. Although about birds, the word feather is used in an idiom, and ‘A phantasmagoria of wishbones’ to which ‘a lonely song calls’, is a wonderful way to evoke the ancestors of the birds. The poem’s treatment of the different parties with similar language: ‘Thriving locals’ and ‘New neighbours’ invites us to reflect on our individual impact.

Of What were we? Pat comments ‘they have nailed the five words seamlessly’ and the ‘poet knows about using words to surprise’. He highlights the ‘sound and rhythm’ which would be great recited in a spoken word or slam performance, and ‘the sudden twist at the end works a treat’.

We could continue discussing details in all the poems—the charming humble garden of Home Horticulture, the playful humour of a conversation between Watson and Holmes in gothic, the subtle images in Laundry where, as Pat says ‘the humdrum is blown wide-open to confront loneliness’, or having been a rower myself as a teenager, I loved the images in The Release, that have an otherworldliness, the subtlety of the water’s voice…

In the end it was the poet’s voice in Nana that stood out for us. As Sophia says, the opening lines beautifully capture the attention: ‘Nana I come to these mountains / to make noises like the Kunekune / or to build a shrine of deliverance’. Pat comments how it ‘seduces by the intimacy of the conversation’ and describes it as ‘an impressive piece of work using a form and language that need careful attention for it not to become sentimental or unstructured’. As with the poem What were we?, when read aloud, the spaces, pauses, and musicality of the poem, really come alive.

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We received a record 148 poems in the Under-16s category this year! It is not always easy to compare poems by younger writers and those closer to 16, however Pat comments that ‘very young poets are just as capable of writing a telling image as those who are older and possess a more extensive vocabulary.’ We hope you’ve enjoyed the challenge and encourage you all to keep exploring the possibilities of language and poetry.

We particularly liked the imagination in Liminal Archive, with its ‘halls of phantasmagoria’ where memories are recorded; archives ‘you can hear’. Sophia says it is ‘a thoughtful poem that “whispers of things, / lost to the wild ocean of time”.’ The doubling up of adjectives in the fourth stanza suggests the complexity of describing each individual experience: ‘biting sting’ and ‘barking shouts’. Pat commented that ‘the poet takes us into a labyrinth of what ifs…’, and is led to ask, ‘what if the neat packages in which we place our history and our hopes for the future are mirages?’

in a faraway land creates a poetic space for imagination and playful alliteration where time clasps at feathers. Curiously it is also one of the few poems to use the past tense of the word eat.

In a similar vein, the poem Phantasmagoria creates a fantasy world with its dreamlike vision of ‘smoke whispering to the trees’ Much like the acrostic poems inspired by the meaning of the word phantasmagoria, this doesn’t try to explain what it is but rather uses the word as a springboard to create the fantasy space.

Pat describes The bush as ‘a conservative verse, except the twist at the end throws the contents wide open. Without saying so the poet asks, what is happening to our world?’ I found it playful and expressive and was left wondering what is going on ‘Unseen, / Outside of time’.

Among poems by younger poets we particularly enjoyed My Grandad is a Wizard, Pat describing it as ‘an imaginative delight’ where the contents ‘at no stage over-reach their task’. Each of the five words is treated in an original way, adding something creative to the story and playing with the idea of phantasmagoria.

In the end we were drawn to the originality and creativity of the poem Gallery Exhibition No. 73.16. with its three rooms (echoing perhaps the different rooms in the video-presentation of the word made by Malcolm Doidge). Sophia describes it as ‘a rich and evocative poetic dream sequence with surprising images and shifts.’ In Pat’s words the poem ‘takes on a form and expands our appreciation of the gallery contents by the way the poet views the exhibition,’ and he notes, it ‘doesn’t tell us what to think about what is going on.’ We are inside a dream space where meaning fades in and out of focus. Sophia comments how ‘the last stanza poignantly conveys climate urgency: “only time can tell us / the duration it will take / for dreamless dust to prevail”.’


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After all our reading and deliberations over 10 days or so, we come to the moment where I look up the names of the poets. There are always lots of surprises. We are delighted to announce the winning poets. The winner of Best Poem is Jason Lingard for his poem Nana and the winner of Best Poem by Under-16s is Miranda Yuan for her poem Gallery Exhibition No. 73.16. This edition we would also like to award a Special Mention to Bhaarati Sharma for her poem My Grandad is a Wizard. The winners receive books courtesy of The Cuba Press and Massey University Press. Congratulations to all on behalf of Given Words, The Cuba Press and Massey University Press.

Below are the winning poems and Special Mention. We also invite you to read our selection of the rest of the poems from adults here and from under-16s here. All entries had to include the following five words: feather, whisper, time, eat, and phantasmagoria.



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Nana

Nana sometimes I come to these mountains
to make noises like the Kunekune
or to build a shrine of deliverance—
                                                      I sit and eat with alpine spirits
                                                      and tell the manu
                                                      things I can’t think about.

At night the rangiora leaves are like little moons
                                                      lighting the way    whispering
                                                      Do you still feel me in your bones?
                               I do
                                      and yes    the adult me still grabs
                                      the leaves of the rimu trees
                                      to feel if they are masculine    or feminine
                                      because as a child    you told me    females are softer
                                      and that made sense    at the time
but in the future    it will not.
So    I lie down on the forest floor
and play dead                letting the huhu and wētā caress me
                                      under a phantasmagoria of stars
                          the ground is feminine—
                          Papatūānuku holding me    because    you’re gone.

So I’m hiding    semi-obscured
                          slivers of flesh poking through ponga ferns
                          stuffing feathers in my ears
—but still    I hear you whisper your favourite song:
                                       It’s so funny, how we don’t talk anymore.

Your words fading    I wave to your wairua    walking backwards
                          softly    on rocks of green teenage flesh
                          mimicking every move the wind makes—
                          in a silken effort
                                                         to disappear.


Jason Lingard
Te Whanganui-a-Tara Wellington


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Gallery Exhibition No. 73.16

phantasmagoria:
a sequence of dreams

one: the feather room
how many plucked birds
does one need
to fill a space with feathers aflight?
still, does any of that matter?
when face to face with jade and pearl
suspended on almost invisible
strings of gossamer.
colours harsh, soft to touch,
downy, never down,
never touching the ground.
but don’t you ever forget
the chords are still there.

two: the lunch room
neon lights fizzle from on to off
off to on—
cues to the silent dancers.
splitting smiles on, inhibitions off.
bring in the whispers of sweet nothings
plated with sweet everythings.
it’s time to eat
gloss and glitter.
the roast pig at the centre
speaks of the heat in the oven.
he is met with disregard,
my condolences.

three: the sand room
after passing an oasis,
the desert always feels drier—
endless expanses
drenched in gold
worth less than a single cent.
only time can tell us
the duration it will take
for dreamless dust to prevail,
the number of epiphanies it will take
to come to terms with the
permanent haze.

phantasmagoria:
to begin and to end



Miranda Yuan, aged 14
Ōtautahi Christchurch


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My Grandad is a Wizard

Grandad lives in a mushroom.
He has a phantasmagoria
of spider jars with dreams and candy
that makes you sick,
a charm that whispers,
a book of secrets made from feathers…
and the scariest of them all
is a haunted doll that eats unicorn horns.

He has a brush that can take you anywhere
any time,
a pirate’s ring filled with mermaid’s hair,
and dragon teeth.

I love my Grandad
and his phantasmagoria!


Bhaarati Sharma, aged 9
Ōtautahi Christchurch


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About the Poets


Jason Lingard is a writer and designer from Pōneke Wellington. He is currently completing the Poetry Work at the Institute for Modern Letters. He is also working on a collection of poetry, and a non-fiction book about fashion and pop music. He has recently had work published with Circular, Void, Rat World, Tarot Journal, and Bad Apple.


Miranda Yuan goes to Burnside High School in Ōtautahi Christchurch and is an aspiring writer who likes experimenting with poetry and prose. She has attended Write On School for Young Writers since she was 11 because she can share her work with like-minded people and get constructive feedback. She is also a competitive rower and a choir kid.


Bhaarati Sharma is 9 years old and lives in Ōtautahi Christchurch with her family and her cat, Trixie. Bhaarati’s poem was inspired by her love of the Harry Potter books and movies. Sadly, she never got to meet her grandads as they lived in Fiji. Doodling and drawing flowers and butterflies is one of Bhaarati’s favourite things to do. She enjoys being with friends, learning about other cultures and meeting new people. Bhaarati can speak Hindi and a little bit of French. In the future, Bhaarati will be a cook or an artist or maybe both.


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Continue reading our selection of poems from adults here and from under-16s here.